French Bomb Threat Article Analysis

The article I reviewed this week is about bomb parts being discovered in a French department store in Paris. Although the information in the article is well-written, it is not presented in inverted-pyramid fashion. The first two paragraphs are good, but the next three all deal with the anonymous person who called a French newspaper warning about the bomb. The only brief mention of the actual parts being discovered (which should be the main focus of the news article, not the threat) is at the end of the third paragraph, where it states that five stick of dynamite were found. The reader has to read through several paragraphs about the week-old threat to find out about many important facts, such as where the bomb was located in the store, whether the store was evacuated, whether the bomb was detonated, and whether anyone was hurt. The information about the threat needs to be placed further down in the article. On a side note, the statistic about another department store's shopper patronship is extraneous because it was not affected by either the bomb or the threat. Anyway, if the paragraphs were rearranged, the article would be a lot more effective.

http://www.nytimes.com/2008/12/17/world/europe/17paris.html